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Nomanis2cool`s starting army! the Reftorrains
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Nomanis2cool`s starting army! the Reftorrains

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IM in the progress, of improving my army, form new sprites, to a similiar, but improved story line. C&C gretaly appreciated! :bandwagon:

My power level. It's over 9000. U mad?
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03-28-2011 10:38 PM
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Re: Nomanis2cool`s starting army! please post some C&C!

It usually helpful if you post a picturof you army with it.
03-28-2011 10:41 PM
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And always update the OP with new information.
I honestly don't plan to make a thread for my latest and greatest army until it's complete and has a full story.
03-28-2011 10:43 PM
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um not nearly done, this isnèt a finishes armie thread more liek a wokr in progress thread for me, if people are interested.

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03-29-2011 01:41 AM
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(03-28-2011 10:43 PM)Dr.Velociraptor link Wrote:And always update the OP with new information.
I honestly don't plan to make a thread for my latest and greatest army until it's complete and has a full story.
how long should the story usually beÉ I dont know if this is too short or too long :S
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k guys i wont be posting for tonight and may be afk tommorow MAY anyway PEACE

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03-29-2011 01:59 AM
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The sprites should be there alongside the story.
As for story, the longer the better in most cases, but don't bother adding things that aren't important just to make it look more impressive.
03-29-2011 02:01 AM
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Honestly, I got 6/8 way into the story and stopped because it was hard to read.
Maybe fix some spelling and such when you get the chance.
03-29-2011 02:08 AM
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Spacing and punctuation do help a lot too, a huge block of text like that is very imposing
03-29-2011 02:11 AM
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(03-29-2011 02:11 AM)Metal Chao link Wrote:Spacing and punctuation do help a lot too, a huge block of text like that is very imposing
For the sake of being polite I had to force my self to look past the block of test and to the meaning of the words.
03-29-2011 02:22 AM
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There were some parts hard to read but it wasn't that bad.
03-29-2011 07:40 PM
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sorry guys it cut me off when i got near the bottom so I coudnt see my mistakes should I make it less lord of the rings type literature? i really enjoy writing its one of my hobbies, so soryr if its too imposing. I like it but im new
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(03-29-2011 02:01 AM)Metal Chao link Wrote:The sprites should be there alongside the story.
As for story, the longer the better in most cases, but don't bother adding things that aren't important just to make it look more impressive.
so should I put little images near certain parts showing what they are doing?

My power level. It's over 9000. U mad?
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I was mostly talking about the first version of your post where the sprites weren't in it at all ;)
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(03-29-2011 02:22 AM)Dr.Velociraptor link Wrote:For the sake of being polite I had to force my self to look past the block of test and to the meaning of the words.
what?
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(03-29-2011 08:56 PM)Metal Chao link Wrote:I was mostly talking about the first version of your post where the sprites weren't in it at all ;)
oh okay, so, hwo should I change the spacing to be better? I think I fixed all typos, and punctuation though.  btw I may be uploading vidoes advertising/ showing this sites pixel armies, and matches. IN the future.
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(03-29-2011 08:58 PM)nomanis2cool link Wrote:oh okay, so, hwo should I change the spacing to be better? I think I fixed all typos, and punctuation though.  btw I may be uploading vidoes advertising/ showing this sites pixel armies, and matches. IN the future.
for youtube
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thanks for all the feedback Im lovin it! :D

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some new stuff, any cc about the airhsip would be great its my first machine, but its kinda maade of scraps

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  Honestly, advertising on Youtube may bring in a completely undesirable group of illiterate and mentally degenerated beings who we should be ashamed to classify as members of the human race.

  I feel that we have to take new members slow because honestly, most of them have NO idea what they are doing and we have to work WITH them to get them to a place where they can be seen as semi-respectable members of our community. In just a few days you had gone from these large, black outlined, abominations to a unit who was able to be classified as workable for a first army. In a community filled with so many new members that all have no idea what they are doing, it would take you possibly a couple of weeks to even get anything remotely close to where you are now.
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(03-29-2011 10:06 PM)Dr.Velociraptor link Wrote:Honestly, advertising on Youtube will bring in a completely undesirable group of illiterate and mentally degenerated beings who we should be ashamed to classify as members of the human race.
true  this group of people are a high class of top hat wearing beings in the internet webz. if u dont wanna I wont though :P

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03-29-2011 10:09 PM
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It's honestly your choice however, I was just stating my opinion. If they are not going to be viewed by the 90% of Youtube that is composed of mentally degenerates then I honestly wouldn't care. But it is your choice and you are free to do as you wish.
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Dr. V, please don't ask people not to advertise.
It is not your place to judge new members, especially ones who haven't even joined and you have never met.
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Sorry, I was just simply stating that it may not be a great idea to advertise on such a place as Youtube because I honestly do not feel we are capable of easily assimilating such a volume of people into our community at one time. (Because seriously, you post something that so many people see and a few hundred or thousand go check it out near instantly.)
I appologize and if required will snip my post.
Anyway, C&C on that airship.
It has a few "bad lines".
Example:
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I can't really tell the shape of it, as there is no apparent shading with random spots of various colours on it, like that random light brown stripe and the grey specks. So maybe work on some shading and such to give it a shape and remove those random specks of grey.
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Yeah, the shading on the aiship is a little funky/nonexistent.
And it has no clear way of forward movement.
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I tried to fix some problems, and some bad lines, but all I could spot was the lines connecting the airship to that the helium ballon. maybe copy and paste the airhsip and circle some bad lines 4 me? :D

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03-31-2011 01:26 AM
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some new stufff, any c&c so far, mostly for airship, and flying armoured guy  :smile:

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The second guy in line at the top looks like he's sniffing a twig. I can't see what he's doing.
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hes holding a spear, and i can see that, ill change it thanks. bttw i wont be posting in a while. taking a "vactaion" sorta thing

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I tried to fix your airship, I mostly changed the shading, but I also changed the fire. Note that fire is bright, and shouldn't be gold and red like you had it before. I wasn't sure what those machines were for, so I left them alone. But another thing you might want to add is illumination from the fire, since I have the light coming from the top right and there is no light given off by the fire. I also eliminated all the scribblestuffs because it looked messy and i didn't know what it was tehre for.
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